Writers' Guild --Temp branch--

Namida · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Tue Dec 02, 2008 2:56 am

I'll probably read that over the weekend Lao *bookmarks* Grats to the Participants NaNoWriNo's of 08' You guys did a good job !
Ugh, I probably could have made a more decent plot if I wasn't writers block'd for the first week and only met the daily quota on weekends. Oh well *stops being angst*
It's over! Time for dreadful editing mode.
I've posted my nano in this forum due to the lack of TSF. *wonders what happened*

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Aelph · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Tue Dec 02, 2008 2:38 pm

If anyone is interested who hasn't read it yet, I've edited and put up the first part of my NaNo stuff on FictionPress -- and I've also got the story I mentioned briefly in the WG a week or so ago on there. I would appreciate some feedback on that (the latter one), if anyone has time... just because I don't often try to write things of this particular nature, but I need to improve on it, so thoughts would be good.

I see that Apotropia is going up. I'll have to read that when I've got some lengthy time on the computer. (Since I get kicked off of these ones after an hour, and they're ridiculously slow -- of course! -- besides. Damn things.)

Meanwhile, I've been doing my linguistics research to get started on languages. Smile

I'm armed with new, WHSmith notebooks (yeeeeeeeeeeeeees) and I'm ready to go for it. (Or rather... ready to fail miserably. But to have some fun doing so.)

Edit: Actually, I guess here I can link directly to the story here, can't I? http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2600107/1/The_Beat_of_Battle (There are some pretty graphic descriptions of wounds, so be warned. It's M-rated for a reason.)

Roadie · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Tue Dec 02, 2008 11:34 pm

I'll try to read and review what you guys have posted by the end of this weekend (depending on how much homework I get, of course -- Finals are in a week or so). I actually got quite a bit of reading and reviewing done last weekend. Smile

My FictionPress is (mostly) empty. I doubt I'll ever post anything interesting in there. Wink

squidmaster64 · Number of posts: 269 Age: 16 Registration date: 2008-11-30

Recommending Aelph's stories. They're amazing. Especially The Beat of Battle. <3

And yes, Apotropia is up. (And it's okay, Aelph--I understand. I'm in no hurry for feedback. You have important things to be tending to atm. -.o)

...Now to figure out why FP logs "fantasy fanfics." fj;hna

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Laogeodritt · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 3:46 am

Languages, Aelph?

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Aelph · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 5:37 pm

Thanks for the rec, squidy. <3

Laogeodritt wrote:

Languages, Aelph?

Da.

Could I maybe ask you to have a look at what I've done once I've got the basics of the grammar down?

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Sediea · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 6:37 pm

Dammit, forums are out again, and I wanted to get a link too.

Hey Squid, do you by any chance have the links you kept on the first page of the other WG? There was one with character building/development(or whatever) exercises I wanted, but I forgot about it, and by the time I remembered, well...yeah...

I always seem to forget until it's too late. Yay for bad memory!

Xandy · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 7:59 pm

I'll get around to reading everyone's once I have access to a regular computer. Wink

And have time to crit and that without being kicked off. Once again, congratulations to the winners. <3

Just as something random...I submitted a short story on FP which I wrote in English. It's short but had to be in order to get full marks. I got an A on it, but I'd like to hear your guy's opinions. Very Happy

It's here. Thanks!

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ladynadiad · Number of posts: 17 Age: 31 Registration date: 2008-12-03

And I love how no one mentioned this to me. I feel seriously unloved Sad

Aelph · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:16 pm

I'll try to have a look at that tomorrow, Xandy, if it's short, since my computer time is so limited -- short is good right now! Wink

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And I love how no one mentioned this to me. I feel seriously unloved Sad

Oops... would have mentioned it on LJ if I hadn't assumed everybody already knew about it by now. (Since I wasn't on at all this past weekend, and I haven't been on MSN in a month.) Sorry. Sad

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Xandy · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:19 pm

ladynadiad wrote:

And I love how no one mentioned this to me. I feel seriously unloved Sad

I've been barely on and I figured someone would've had told you. I'm sorry. D:

Aelph wrote:

I'll try to have a look at that tomorrow, Xandy, if it's short, since my computer time is so limited -- short is good right now!

Take your time, I'm not gonna be able to see it soon anyways. Smile

Just...not on the weekend...I won't see it at all...:')

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Aelph · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:20 pm

I likely won't be on on weekends, either, since I'm using library computers for the most part. Wink

We can share the pain now.

(I have my computer, but my father-in-law can't remember the password to get on the internet, so it's basically useless for that.)

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Laogeodritt · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Wed Dec 03, 2008 11:59 pm

Aelph wrote:

Da.

Could I maybe ask you to have a look at what I've done once I've got the basics of the grammar down?

Oh, right, your NaNo, right?

Sure, if you wish. My linguistics knowledge is passive though — mostly looking stuff up when I needed it, and reading through a network of linguistics-related articles on Wikipedia when I stumble upon one or start looking something up on a language.

Um, your father-in-law doesn't even know his network's access password? Oh, my.

I read the FP story, by the way, Aelph. Overall? Really well written, I loved it. More detailed comments are forthcoming.

Um, just going to leave this here in case the Tales forums dies again, since I expanded on my really quick notes on what to improve that I had before in this post.

Laogeodritt wrote:

Hey, guys, could anyone take a look at this short story I've been writing? I'm looking for some moderately advanced critique and your own person opinion of the piece; this is a fourth or fifth draft, not final, and I intend to rewrite a lot of it, but I would like some feedback before embarking on this endeavour.

Suggestions for titles would be appreciated, as well.

Untitled (Revenge)

Also, some of my notes on what to improve, to give you an idea of what direction this is headed. Comments on the decisions I've made or am trying to make are appreciated, as well.

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* develop Jenna, Sai, Gang further as people
--> Sai and Gang: greater motive for rape/murder, create a contrast between MCHAR's demonization of them and a more rational, human aspect through their own conduct during the final scenes
--> Jenna's connection and feelings to MCHAR. Poisoning — show self-conflict?

* Pt of deliberation: Sai and Gang's true motives behind the murder? Relationship between Sai/Gang and MCHAR when they met at Hi-no-tao, before the rape? What about CURRENt relationship? Corollary of this decision: should the poisoning actually occur or not?
--> Why was Sai and Gang's appearance in that little village so opportune? Were they seeking out MCHAR under pretext of a mission? Why? (--> c.f. relationship)

* Rewrite and expand "summary" scenes, and develop characters through these expansions further

* Work on MCHAR's tone to match the way he thinks (e.g. indifference to life, the world except for Lynn's vengeance and Sai/Gang)

* Expose more of MCHAR's thoughts and conviction through the battles, rather than switching to a pure action- and tactics-based narrative

* Sai battle: demonstrate Sai's tiring and change of tactics to obviate his strenuous combat style

* Define Lynn more clearly, as well as her relationship with MCHAR and the relative timeframe of the war/murder

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Namida · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Thu Dec 04, 2008 3:02 am

I'm suck in a quick writers block ugh. I did a little research on planetary terrains for the Sci Fi Arc and now I've got all these ideas and I'm having trouble conveying them. I don't know if researching was good or not.
*sigh* forums down again.

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Cruxis · Subject: Re: Writers' Guild --Temp branch-- Thu Dec 04, 2008 3:08 am

Hi, all. I'm not part of the guild, but I wanted to let you all know that there is a RP forum now.

(Just in case any of you would be in interested in that sort of thing.)